Plan
Who=Mia & I
Where=My house
why =for a play
When=In the Holidays
What did we do=Tramp,watched TV,danced,played tablet & played with Meela my cat.
What time Mia came and left
Came 3pm left 5pm
It all started at 3pm
When Mia came over.We went straight to the tramp and started to dance.We played on there for a bit then we started a game called the carry on game.
Then we played with Meela.
We played on my tablet
And watched TV.
At four I showed Mia my explore craft 2 machin.
Then we played on the tramp again and i showed Mia my front flip.We took turns showing each other our tricks to music.
Then it was time for Mia to go at 5pm it was fun.
At school on the first day we gave each other a hug & Played together.
The End
Thanks Ella for sharing this recount of your fun day with Mia. Do you think you might need to think about different sentence starters rather than using 'then' so often? What about some of these - First, next, then, lastly, finally, after, meanwhile, before long, afterwards, after a while.
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